User blog comment:Dragon-Fox 7/Character Sheet/@comment-24696772-20180628233906/@comment-4867780-20180717034540

"[ I ] became far more in tune to my phallus manhood in the most noble way"

I just had to quote this this one XD I'm not sure what "being in tune" with it could mean (aside from strongly and quickly reacting to outside stimuli), and I'm even less certain about the possibly for mating urges to register as noble ^ ^;

On a more grammatical note, I believe "idiocy" is the correct word in place of "idiocity".

What does "the day when I ascended" refer to ? I thought John's ascension happened gradually and actually continues happening through time and learning/training/experience ? The way you said it makes it sound like it was suddenly empowered in a Lawrence-like way, rather than steadily building himself all along to ever-greater heights.

In the same vein, when and how did John become the "embodiment of humanity" ? Sounds like the epic conclusion of an equally epic journey, that is difficult to imagine and there seems to be little to no reference of so far. Maybe it would a good opportunity for a mini-story about his early life and rise to power, culminating with this life-changing event that made him the godlike embodiment of human potential he currently is.