User blog comment:Lu666/story of Edill d beyond belief/@comment-30766268-20180707192533

1. the pictures have nothing to do with the story, and there are too many of them. my advice, take off some (99%) of them. start of with the pictures from Neon Genesis Evangelion.

2. COMMAS! USE BLOODY COMMAS!!!!! AND DOTS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

3. so, basically, your story is that you got out of nowhere the ability to bestow upon yourself everr power you so choose, and then you assimilated your future self, causing your existance to become a temporal one, as in the future you will assimilate yourself with said past version, and then you became god, and went on for a murder and revange spree against everyone who did wrong to you, leading to you having all your dreams come true, and no you terrorize everyone, and force them to accept you into whatever job you wish to work at, as they all know that if they disobey, you will destory them all. correct?