User blog comment:Teien/Shiori Calvello/@comment-17698791-20151121182709

Wow...wow, wow, wow, wow. This is honestly the best she you have ever made. You put a lot more effort, emotion, and a little more details in to it. This is pretty cool. here is what I have to say for each section.

Backstory: I really like the backstory, it is pretty awesome if I must say so myself. Though it could use a lot more details. I find myself asking more questions than I should about the story. You don't really go into detail of how her parent's died, like how did they die? And then there is the "Dry Ice" technique, what is that technique? You don't go into detail or anything about it, just the name. Also, who is her Grandfather? You don't really give a backstory on him or tell us about him only that he was a rogue agent and mage. But other than that, the backstory is pretty good.

Appearance: Her appearance is very nice, you put a lot of detail into. Though is she shorter in her Absolute Zero form than she is in normal form? Other than that,  I really like it, nothing else to really say about it except you did an excellent job

Alternate Battle Mode:

God Lightning Mode: Honestly, is this supposed to be a mode where she uses lightning based abilities instead of Ice and Water ones? Because all I see is "Lightning Blasts" and that doesn't really seem like something a person as highly trained as her would only have. I'd think she would have multiple lightning abilities ranging from ones that were nonlethal to ones that would probably kill in one shot, depending on how skilled she would be. But I like it though since electricity is one of my most favorite things.

Yuki-Onna Mode: Not much I could say about this really.

Personality: She has the typical emotions and personality I would except from a teenager who lost their parents, but the blade thing leaves me speechless. Really? Sister, family, and lover? Bordering a little to close to anime-like with that. We don't even know who Blade is except he left and is her long-lost cousin. Maybe if you would help me with Blade if he was a sheet to give me and link that has a more indepth knowledge as to why she would be wanting to commit or is commiting incest with him.

Absolute Zero Personality: This is a pretty good one, some alternate forms for characters have a level-headed or cool personality, so great job pulling this one off, could be hard for some people.

Powers: I couldn't wait to talk about this. The powers are just fantastic, if there is anything I love it is when someone can actually make me fall in love with water abilities, and you have done it. I honestly love Ice abilities because of Sub-Zero, but you have made me love Water abilities just as much as I like Ice ones. I really love how you added Esoteric Ice Manipulation and Water Form Manipulation, they are really great powers, and it's fun to see you added.

I also love what you did with Water Absorption, how her body expands when she absorbs the water. how it is a passive ability and that she can regenerate using the water, which is a pretty good move. Her spell Edelweiss is a little overpowered because it is 72 seconds. A lot of stuff can be done in 72 seconds, especially her. Could be nerfed a bit, to maybe 15 to 25 seconds if you were taking suggestions, because a lot can be done in that amount of, just not too many things like 72 seconds.

Though, having an Unfettered Body is pretty pointless if you're gonna have Water Absorption, also vice verse with Water Absorption, and I would like to see some electric powers thrown in because of her God Lightning mode.

Abilities: Now to be considered the strongest in the academy, but one of the strongest in her team, is a little contradictory. I really like that you gave some feats and told us what happens if she used her powers on a massive scale, shows us she isn't too overpowered.

Powers and Weapons: I'd imagine all that combat ability would be granted because of her training, so I don't expect anything bad.

Her Immense Strength is something, I must say, pretty darn powerful...one flick and a 8ft solid concrete pillar is gonna get destroyed, says things. I wonder how she practiced controlling her strength.

Great Speed is great. Just how fast?

Not bad durability, don't have anything else to say about.

Lighning blast is a pretty cool power, I'm really liking the feats you're leaving.

Relationships: Need some more details here, can't speak about it if I don';t know it.

Limits: They are all pretty reasonable, except the fire one. How is she weak to fire when she can use water? Is it because of precipation and vapor?

Theme: I absolutely love it, nice pick.

Trivia: I love it, you did something you didn't or never had to do and you put as much effort into it as you did your sheet, I am sure of it.