User blog comment:Sega Fro/Cloaked Legends 1: Keterspace/@comment-26322734-20150905182033

Alright, you have good ideas here. But as a writer and an avid reader, this isn't exactly interesting to me from an entertainment perspective. BUT that may not have been your goal here, and my opinion isn't universal, so take that with the weight of a grain of salt. This is a pretty cool idea and a lot of cool things can be done with it.

As of the page itself, formatting would probably help, and grammar in the writing could use some work. The overall lore and explanation could have a better presentation; like what do you mean by "bad things" and "good things"? Can you give examples? Is this place, in nature, an eldritch location? What do you mean by "esoteric" and "sacred"?

Overall, great ideas here. Presentation could be a bit better, but then again, we all have stuff to improve on, y'know?